So me and the rest of my class debated weather Goldilocks from Goldilocks and the three bears should go to jail or not.
In my opinion, Goldilocks should go to jail because she broke into the bear's home then started using their stuff, which is weird, and disrespectful.
So anyways, I wrote Goldilocks and the three bears in my own way.
Story:
One day in the sunny, damp forest, there was a girl named Goldilocks.
She had been walking along a pathway when she saw a small, two story house.
She looked through the window and started to giggle.
“ This will be fun. “ She announced, rubbing her small, pale hands together.
Goldilocks innocently skipped up to the brown wooden door, and aggressively kicked it open.
“ Well, that was very easy. “ The moment Goldilocks walked into the cozy home,
She smelt..
“ Honey! Delicious! “
Goldilocks Jogged to the rectangle dining table, and said to herself; “ Mmm.. It smells so good! .. “It won’t hurt just to have a taste..” Goldilocks sat on the biggest chair at the table and grabbed a spoon the size of a pineapple.
“OW! MY TONGUE! TOO HOT!” she pounced from the chair and sat on the next one, grabbed the spoon, which was about the size of an apple, and gobbled it up just like she sat with the last one.
“ Ew! Too cold! I deserve something much better than this! “ She got to the last, and smallest chair with a normal sized spoon, just right for goldilocks.
But Goldilocks didn’t just break into any house.. She broke into the home of a bear family!
[With the bears]
“Mummy! Why are we going for such a long walk?” said the baby bear, who was about 6 years old, and was wearing a green hoodie.
“ We thought it would be nice to have some family time. “ The mother bear replied. Mother bear was exactly 30 years old. And was wearing a light pink dress and a white flowery apron over it. “Isn’t that right father bear?” Said mother bear again.
“Yes, it’s a nice day out.” Said father bear. He was the eldest in the family, with the age 38. He wore a singlet that was nearly the colour of his fur, but a bit lighter.
[ Back with Goldilocks ]
“Mmmm... that last bowl of honey was amazing!” Said Goldilocks, who was sitting on the velvet red sofa. She had eaten all of the baby bear’s honey!
Goldilocks walked around to see if there was anything interesting in the house, after she had finished chucking a bunch of objects that she could sell. She walked upstairs to see a hallway with 2 doors on each side. She walked into the first door on the left.
When Goldilocks walked in the room, she saw three bookshelves. One was as tall as the wall behind it, the other was medium sized, and the last one was tiny, nearly the size of Goldilocks, but a bit taller.
“That's weird.. Why would anyone keep different sized bookshelves in a separate room from the others.” Goldilocks grunted lightly.
She pulled a book out of the biggest bookshelf. But the book wasn’t very interesting for Goldilocks. It was about exterior design, Which she thought was boring, so she put it away. The next bookshelf was just about medium sized. The little girl pulled a book out of that shelf, but the book was a cookbook, and Goldilocks didn’t even know how to use a microwave. So she put the book back. And the last bookshelf was small, and as Goldilocks pulled a book about she stretched into a wide smile.
“ Finally! A cool book! “ She announced.
She put the book in her bag.
[with the bears]
“ Oh no! It’s starting to spit, maybe we should start getting home now. ``said mother bear.
“ You’re right, c’mon Baby Bear! “ Called father bear over to baby bear.
“ Okay dad! “ Baby bear replied.
[With goldilocks]
Goldilocks barged into another room. But this time there were three Beds. Once again, they went in order from largest, to smallest. Goldilocks jumped onto the biggest bed.
“ Is this made out of wood or something? It’s way too hard! “
So she carefully got down from the bed and pounced onto the next one.
As soon as Goldilocks jumped onto the bed, she started sinking into the dark pink sheets.
“ AHH! WHY DO PEOPLE LIKE THESE KIND OF BEDS?! “
Goldilocks screeched.
She got out of the bed a few minutes later to try the last bed.
“ The small ones are always just right for me. “
So then She once again threw herself onto the smallest bed and sighed with relief, as the bed was the best, most comfortable bed.
But then she got up
“ Wait, I can’t sleep now! The owner of this house could come soon! “
So Goldilocks grabbed her bag and started stuffing valuable items into it.
[Later]
The bears had finally got home. But they were shocked to come home to a broken door.
“ … SOMEONE BROKE INTO OUR HOME! “ Father bear called.
Goldilocks heard the Scream from downstairs and jumped.
“ Oh no.. I’ve gotta get out of here! “ Goldilocks started running but when she got out of the door, she saw the family of bears standing in front of her.
“ AHH! BEARS! WHY ARE YOU HERE?! “ Goldilocks yelled to the bears, not knowing that they could talk.
“ We could ask you the same question! “ Mother bear replied.
“ THEY TALK?! “ Goldilocks screeched once again.
Father bear blocked her way as Goldilocks was trying to escape, Father bear scared her so badly that she accidentally said to them;
“ Call the police then, if you can catch me honey brain! “ *Gasp* Goldilocks gasped at herself and covered her mouth, scared about what she thought would happen next.
“ Mummy! Call the police! “ Squeaked baby bear.
“ Good idea baby bear. “ Mother bear replied in a tired voice.
A few minutes passed and the police were finally here. Goldilocks had complained a few times about how she needed a place to stay. Mother bear nearly asked if she wanted to stay when father bear picked up her bag with all the bear’s stuff in it.
The police took Goldilocks to the police station and she ended up being in prison for about 4 months. Father bear ended up making a new door and they lived happily ever after.
Or did they?
I hope you liked the story :D
Ka pai Aaliyah. you've put a lot of effort into your story, I especially enjoyed your descriptive language. You make a good point about Goldilocks breaking the law. Do you think she would deserve to be arrested if she had been lost in the woods for days and was starving and exhausted?
ReplyDeleteHello Phil,
DeleteI think that would be sad but she still broke the law, She didn't even knock which also annoys me, Haha.
Thank you for commenting Phil =)
Hey Aaliyah you did so much it for me it took 5 minutes to read it it was long.
ReplyDeleteHey Aaliyah
ReplyDeleteI really enjoyed your version of goldilocks! I liked the ending where even after all that mother bear wanted to help until! The variety in your vocabulary too, made it really interesting
Do you think 4 months is long enough? She broke into the house, destroyed property, tried to steal and then lied! That’s a lot of bad stuff.
Keep it up!